习作题目
　　
　　假如今天是五月一日，星期六，天气晴朗，你和爸爸妈妈在逛书店，当你在翻阅一本书时，你看见一个外国人正在和售货员说什么，只见售货员一个劲地摇头，她脸都红了。你走向前去，才知道那位老外是加拿大人，他想为女朋友买一本中国名胜指南，但售货员听不懂英语，你帮了那个加拿大人，那位加拿大人叫杰克，他给你留下了电话号码。
　　
　　请根据以上提示，用英语与一篇日记。
　　
　　注意：
　　
　　1. 格式正确。
　　
　　2. 日记应包括：（ 1 ）加拿大人和售货员对你的态度；（ 2 ）你爸爸妈妈对你的看法；（ 3 ）你自己的认识。
　　
　　3. 词数： 120 － 140 。
　　
　　学生原文
　　
　　May 1, Saturday Fine
　　
　　Today is Labour's Day. ① I and my father and mother ② went to the bookstore together. When looking through one of the books, I noticed a foreigner say ③ something to a shop assistant. She was shaking her head and her face turned red. I went up to them, and knew that Jack, he was a Canadian, ④ wanted to buy a copy of Guide to Places of Interest in China. But the assistant couldn't understand him. So I helped them, who were all ⑤ very thankful for me. Jack left me his telephone number, hoping me to keep ⑥ in touch with him. I'm glad to see that my English has been greatly improved.
　　
　　习作点评
　　
　　这篇学生习作格式准确，考生能够写出大部分要点，部分句子非常精炼，像“ When looking through... ”，但考生的语言流畅性差，句型用的较复杂，也就难免出现失误。
　　
　　考生注重了对在书店的细节的描写，字数与题目要求的最低限吻合，但题目要求的部分要点不完整，遗漏了“（ 2 ）你爸爸妈妈对你的看法；（ 3 ）你自己的认识”，考生需要认真审题，保证要点完整，语言规范。现把文中出现的部分问题分述如下：
　　
　　1. Labour's 改为 Labour ，因为 labour 是一个抽象名词；五一劳动节还可以用“ May 1/ May Day ”表示。
　　
　　2. 汉语中通常说“我和……”，在英语中当表示“肯定、赞扬”的陈述时，“ I ”置后；当要承担责任或做自我批评时，一般把“ I ”置前。此处可以改为“ My father, my mother and I/ my parents and I ”。
　　
　　3. 把 do 改为 doing, notice sb. doing 表示宾语的动作正在进行。
　　
　　4. 把 he 改为 who ， who 在此引导非限定性定语从句。
　　
　　5. all 改为 both ，父母表示“两者”，当表示“三者或三者以上”时用 all 。
　　
　　6. 当表示“希望某人干某事”时，可以用“ wish sb. to do/ expect sb. to do ”，但不能用“ hope sb. to do ”，可以用“ hope that.... ”；此处可以改为“ expecting me to... / hoping that I... ”。
　　
　　7. 文章后半部分遗漏了两处要点（参阅参考答案）。
　　
　　精品范文
　　
　　May 1, Saturday Fine
　　
　　Today is Labour Day. My parents and I went to the bookstore together. When looking through one of the books, I noticed a foreigner saying something to a shop assistant, who shook her head with her face red. I went up to them, and knew that Jack, who was a Canadian, wanted to buy a copy of Guide to Places of Interest in China. But the assistant couldn't understand him. So I helped them, who were very thankful for me. Jack left me his telephone number, hoping that I could keep in touch with him. My parents felt proud of me. I'm glad to see that my English has been greatly improved. I think it's also important for we Chinese to learn a foreign language well. Only in this way can we meet the needs of the society.
　　
　　摘自 中国中学生英语优秀作文精品廊